Well let me start by saying the term squidbilly is hardly politically correct. They prefer to be called super southern squids of the land variety, you racist pig! Anyway I digress your post seems overall very good. Early seems to be very all American just like me, not at all a dirty commie. I also think you reached both your audiences on a very deep level and talked to them in a way that says "Hey you! Shut up and listen to my tale of intrigue and southern squids". So your post draws me in and I like what I see but there are issues. For example your grandparents comment is unfinished! It ends right in the middle of a sentence! I mean unless this is like a super cliff hanger! Where you can’t even finish the sentence lest it ruin the whole series! If it’s not a cliffhanger then finish your thought. So overall in future just check over your posts to make sure the spelling is correct and that you actually finished them. Other than that, very well done.
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Well let me start by saying the term squidbilly is hardly politically correct. They prefer to be called super southern squids of the land variety, you racist pig! Anyway I digress your post seems overall very good. Early seems to be very all American just like me, not at all a dirty commie. I also think you reached both your audiences on a very deep level and talked to them in a way that says "Hey you! Shut up and listen to my tale of intrigue and southern squids". So your post draws me in and I like what I see but there are issues. For example your grandparents comment is unfinished! It ends right in the middle of a sentence! I mean unless this is like a super cliff hanger! Where you can’t even finish the sentence lest it ruin the whole series! If it’s not a cliffhanger then finish your thought. So overall in future just check over your posts to make sure the spelling is correct and that you actually finished them. Other than that, very well done.
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